Comments for Tom Moses

Comment on Moon Knight, A Twist of Fate pt. 1 by Mick Edwards

Mick Edwards — Wed, 09 Dec 2009 13:53:26 +0000

That was great, Moe. You really have a way with words.

Comment on Carnivore by Tom Moses

Tom Moses — Fri, 13 Nov 2009 03:47:15 +0000

Thanks man, I really appreciate the compliments, but I dunno if I can really back up being on the level of Munn! Thanks!

Comment on Carnivore by Mick Edwards

Mick Edwards — Mon, 09 Nov 2009 16:14:55 +0000

This is a wonderful story, man. I don’t remember if I told you that when we talked, but I mean it when I said it you were up there with Munn in terms of being a master of horror. I don’t know why you and Munn don’t try putting together a submission package. Both of you together would make a killer team

-Mick

Comment on Fireteam Spectre: “A Life Made of Days” by Caleb Kinkaid

Caleb Kinkaid — Tue, 26 May 2009 04:27:41 +0000

You’re quickly becoming the master of the (mostly) silent, somber slow-boil. I dare say it’s becoming the trademark of Thomas “The Typewriter” Moses.

The ending of this installment was equally inevitable and staggering. How Jackson can live with a person who’s essentially a ghost is a mystery to me; the exhaustion his marriage brings is palpable throughout the narrative. His only reprieve is his meal with Dean, and your writing style abruptly shifts to show how great a departure the conversation is from Jackson’s day-to-day existence.

There are a handful of paragraphs where the tense changes from past to present, though, which detracts from the story. But, the mood is so spot-on that it’s easy to settle back into the narrative flow after encountering those hiccups.

All in all, a strong start. Very interested in seeing what this becomes.

Comment on The Clink part 4: “Hug-a-Thug” by Tom Moses

Tom Moses — Tue, 26 May 2009 01:38:15 +0000

Thanks for the comment and I’m glad I got across that both of these personalities were dominant in their own right. It would’ve been far too easy to put Doctor Jones on top, but it would’ve taken Jules down a notch too.

Comment on The Clink part 4: “Hug-a-Thug” by Caleb Kinkaid

Caleb Kinkaid — Tue, 26 May 2009 01:34:24 +0000

Heh. “Hug-a-Thug.” Great title.

And good work on the dialogue for this tete-a-tete. Their personalities, each dominant in its own way, shined through distinctly. I hope Dr. Jones shows up again in the future. Jules, very clearly, needs someone to talk to about what all’s on his mind. If he’ll just let his guard down a little more…

Comment on The Clink part 3: “Home sweet…” by Tom Moses

Tom Moses — Thu, 21 May 2009 02:56:37 +0000

There are little jokes that i need to throw in there to break up all the tension, Jules has to have some sort of acceptance of his reality somewhere, and joking is where it lies.

Part 4 is scheduled for release on Monday, and as usually I’m starting to really break down Jules, so when the shoe drops we’ll see if its what you expect! Thanks man, glad you enjoy it.

Comment on The Clink part 3: “Home sweet…” by Caleb Kinkaid

Caleb Kinkaid — Thu, 21 May 2009 02:52:53 +0000

They should get troubled youths to read this as part of Scared Straight, man. ‘Cause I don’t think anyone wants to be where Jules is. There’s so much foreboding and built-up tension here that, when the other shoe drops, I’m sure it’ll be all kinds of horrible and mesmerizing. I’m kind of afraid to see how this all plays out, but, at the same time, I can’t look away. Well done.

Also? “Dispens[ing] a little soft serve” is a hilarious euphemism. Christ, I was cracking up.

Comment on Fires from the Fallen by Tom Moses

Tom Moses — Mon, 11 May 2009 19:05:13 +0000

Thanks, D! I was thinking about the reason as to why I still wrote fan fic recently and one of the reasons I feel I should leave that arena is due to the restrictions that I feel are on me when I write other people’s characters. I have had a lot more fun writing here than writing for fan fiction for quite a while. Thanks man. And Just a little side note, I’m slowly rebuilding Sleepwalker into an original project that I’ll begin posting here soon as well!

Comment on Fires from the Fallen by Derrick

Derrick — Mon, 11 May 2009 12:20:20 +0000

Wonderfully vivid images full of sensory description here. I’ve probably mentioned this before and if I haven’t I should have: your original fiction has a freedom of imagination that I honestly feel you stifle in your fan fiction. I hesitate to suggest you expand this as it’s nice and tight the way it is. Matter of fact you should submit it to 365 TOMORROWS http://www.365tomorrows.com/about/ check it out. I think it would be a perfect home for a piece like this.